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Bottom of the garden – By Mason

Posted by: | February 11, 2016 | 5 Comments |

Bottom of the garden

She was told not to go. She was warned to leave it alone but she didn’t care. When everyone in the neighbourhood was asleep, she crept out of bed, slipped on her fluffy rabbit slippers and slowly but surely tipped toed down the old wooden stairs. Suddenly she was faced with her biggest challenge: getting past the butler, who was polishing apples. The girl’s parents were really wealthy her dad was a bank manager and her mum was a dentist.
She crawled under the polished, glass window to the bottom of the garden there it was she was shocked to see…

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5 Comments

  1. By: McKenna on February 16, 2016 at 5:04 pm      

    Your writing is wonderful. I like how it is mysterious and you don’t know what is going to happen next. Do you have to have 100 words or can you have more. Maybe even less if you want to, right? I like how you writing starts out by drawing my attention. In the last it makes me wonder and want it to go on. You did a good job.

    • By: mason on March 4, 2016 at 3:50 pm      

      thank you for commenting i can’t wait to get to know you over the weeks.what is your favourite topic do you like school

  2. By: Rebecca on February 23, 2016 at 4:07 am      

    Mason, l really enjoyed reading your story. It was very interesting from the beginning all the way to the end. I especially loved the part about the little mystery and the cliffhanger. That’s my favorite type of story. What is your favorite? I also thought it was cool that you had such a good plot and told it in 100 words. You did great! Bye!

  3. By: Nathan on February 26, 2016 at 6:03 pm      

    I wonder why you kept things mysterious about the ending, but I really liked the challenge, getting past the butler, I thought it was really funny. And I really like your plot! It was a pleasure to read your post. It was a great story.

  4. By: Elizabeth p. on February 26, 2016 at 9:03 pm      

    Mason I like that you grab the reader’s attention just like a good book would and i catch myself thinking what might happen next. I wonder if you like to write. If you do you are really good at it so you should keep writing and inspire others! Great job on that story but I am still wondering what does happen? In the end of the story?

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