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Dream – By Jazz

Posted by: | February 11, 2016 | 2 Comments |

I woke up in a house not my house I was so scary. I turn the light on it did not look like a normal house I saw something I did not know what it was. The floor was creaking. I saw it again. Were was I. Terrified I don’t know what to do. There was a door I opened it but it was locked. I yelled “let me out”. There it was! I hear a bang now I hide. “please mum, dad help, why me mum, dad ”. I got out of my hiding place. No there it was she was shocked to see…

 

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  1. By: Cynthia L. on February 26, 2016 at 6:16 pm      Reply

    I really liked your story! I think that after the reader reads the last sentence, they will wonder what happens next, so if there is a next part, they will be eager to read it. I think that it is a good strategy that authors use before they switch to a new chapter. This makes me wonder what happens next, so I hope you make a next part! I think you make an great writer, and know many good strategies when writing. Hope to see more of your writing!

  2. By: John K. on February 28, 2016 at 7:17 pm      Reply

    Your story is very interesting. Your strategy at the beginning for hooking the reader is good. This is important because you don’t want the reader to loose interest at the start of the story. This makes me think of the time that I had a very scary dream very similar to your story. I found myself wondering if there are a lot of people who have scary dreams? If so, then I can relate to your story and probably many others. I would love to see more of your writing.

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